Sonnet
Initial thought: I wanted to make a Sonnet based on a lovely girl’s features (an abstract character of a girl) but after I wrote 4 lines, I felt it was a little bit too complicated, so I changed to a short story.
Possible names: Depression, Rejection, A Man’s Life
The wilderness, a dark and lifeless husk,
Encompassed one, who’s heart was crumbled, closed.
He never was a blossoming red rose,
Nor be a bird, just hiding after dusk.
There once were sudden glimpses of daylight,
He left his hut, embraced the newest day.
A spark of an affection shot a ray;
That gorgeous lady stood still in his sight.
His footsteps, closer towards her he went,
and step by step his confidence increased.
She glanced at him, her stunning eyes relent,
His heart warmed up, that cannot be surcease.
“May I become your friend with your consent?”
“No way, stranger.” And then his heart deceased.
This poem is about a man who was not willing to face the world, but during one day, he steps out of his comfort zone. He sees a lady, and he finds her beautiful. After an exchange of eyes, he asks to become friends, but she rejects.
This poem is in Italian Sonnet form (abba abba cdcdcd) and is in iambic pentameter.
Reflection: As I started writing the poem, I wrote it very abstract, as if a man got rejected and was too timid to leave the hole (somewhat like the story of the frog in the hole). I tried to make a breaking point, during the second quatrain (or second half of the octet). It took me a bit of time to create this, as it was hard to create a scenery. The sextet of the poem featured a turning point, where he meets a lady. When I was writing it, it was hard to find a good rhyme for the scenery. I tried really hard, with a possibility of making the last two lines a success rather than a fail. I ended up settling with a “fail” just because I could find better words for rhythm and rhymes.
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